Room 6 have been learning about Matariki. We read myths and then wrote our own. Here are some. You can read other people's myths by going to their blog.
Kia ora Room 6 myth writers, Thanks for sharing your myths Larissa, Helaina and Isabel. Larissa I like the comic style of yours and the way you have used speech bubbles for your characters. I also like that you have drawn your own pictures, it really shows your creativity. You may like to check your spelling of pieces - sometimes it is the correct spelling but other times not. It's such a tricky word! Helania and Isabel, I like that you have used a GIF on your first slide, it def grabs the readers attention. I wonder if you could add some pictures to your story to make it more visual too. Great work creating DLO's and sharing. Keep it up. Tania
hi I'm Simon from st Bernadette school. I was scrolling down when I saw the stars moving it really stood out. I really like how you put the letters bigger when the chief was yelling(that freaked me out). I think you should make the the text more clearer but the presentation still stood out for me
Hello Room 6, Thank you for sharing your myths Larissa, Helaina and Isabel. Larissa I like the comic style of yours and the way you have used speech bubbles for your characters. I also like that you have drawn your own pictures, it really shows your creativity. You may like to check your spelling of pieces - sometimes it is the correct spelling but other times not. It's such a tricky word! Helania and Isabel, I like that you have used a GIF on your first slide, it really grabs the readers attention. I wonder if you could add some pictures to your story to make it more visual too. Keep it up
Hello Room 6, I'm Nathan from St Bernadette's school.This slideshow stood out because of the stars,when I read it I really enjoyed reading it.For the first slideshow,I noticed a word that was misspelled, it was (peice) It is spelled piece in slide number three.I suggest you correct it Thanks.But the two slideshow are really creative.
Hello, I'm Marcus from st Bernadette's school. this Slideshow stood out because of the Blinking Stars, once I read it, I really enjoyed it. For the first slideshow, I noticed a word the was misspelled the word (Peice) i suggest you Correct it. For both slides, i thought they were creative. the second slideshow, id appreciate it if you added visuals.
Hello Room 6, I'm Lance from St.Bernadette's School, when I was scrolling down I saw the stars move and wanted to check it out but when I was looking at Larissa's slide show I sore a mistake (Piece). Next time can you reread your slideshow but other than that the rest is pretty good keep it up.
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Kia ora Room 6 myth writers,
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your myths Larissa, Helaina and Isabel. Larissa I like the comic style of yours and the way you have used speech bubbles for your characters. I also like that you have drawn your own pictures, it really shows your creativity. You may like to check your spelling of pieces - sometimes it is the correct spelling but other times not. It's such a tricky word! Helania and Isabel, I like that you have used a GIF on your first slide, it def grabs the readers attention. I wonder if you could add some pictures to your story to make it more visual too. Great work creating DLO's and sharing. Keep it up.
Tania
hi I'm Simon from st Bernadette school. I was scrolling down when I saw the stars moving it really stood out. I really like how you put the letters bigger when the chief was yelling(that freaked me out). I think you should make the the text more clearer but the presentation still stood out for me
ReplyDeleteHello Room 6,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your myths Larissa, Helaina and Isabel. Larissa I like the comic style of yours and the way you have used speech bubbles for your characters. I also like that you have drawn your own pictures, it really shows your creativity. You may like to check your spelling of pieces - sometimes it is the correct spelling but other times not. It's such a tricky word! Helania and Isabel, I like that you have used a GIF on your first slide, it really grabs the readers attention. I wonder if you could add some pictures to your story to make it more visual too.
Keep it up
Hello Room 6,
ReplyDeleteI'm Nathan from St Bernadette's school.This slideshow stood out because of the stars,when I read it I really enjoyed reading it.For the first slideshow,I noticed a word that was misspelled, it was (peice) It is spelled piece in slide number three.I suggest you correct it Thanks.But the two slideshow are really creative.
Hello,
ReplyDeleteI'm Marcus from st Bernadette's school. this Slideshow stood out because of the Blinking Stars, once I read it, I really enjoyed it. For the first slideshow, I noticed a word the was misspelled the word (Peice) i suggest you Correct it. For both slides, i thought they were creative. the second slideshow, id appreciate it if you added visuals.
Hello Room 6,
ReplyDeleteI'm Lance from St.Bernadette's School, when I was scrolling down I saw the stars move and wanted to check it out but when I was looking at Larissa's slide show I sore a mistake (Piece). Next time can you reread your slideshow but other than that the rest is pretty good keep it up.
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ReplyDeleteHello class I like the explanation in the story how its writ in out in line 1 to 2 because it hooks you in and its informative.
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